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kissed her, kissed her
static system stuck to blistered skin
ecstatic, sister give me back my memories of sin
unstuck, the trickster. tick the billet
take the ballot - let me in.

Date: 2008-03-10 04:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] woodburner.livejournal.com
I really, really like "static system stuck to blistered skin".

Date: 2008-03-11 12:39 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] maggiebloome.livejournal.com
That was the first line ^^ we were only supposed to write one line and i got carried away :P

Date: 2008-03-11 01:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_fakeplastic/
There's something about this that I really like.

Date: 2008-03-11 01:39 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] maggiebloome.livejournal.com
Sound repetition is just that cool. also, having an odd number of beats to a line makes poetry really compelling because it just drags you across to the next line in hopes of finishing the rhythm.

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